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Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 11)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2015-11-24
Requested 2015-11-12
Authors Yuanlong Jiang , Lucy Yong , Manuel Paul
Draft last updated 2015-11-13
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -10 by Russ Housley (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -10 by Sheng Jiang (diff)
Rtgdir Early review of -07 by Lizhong Jin (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Russ Housley
State Completed
Review review-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10-genart-lc-housley-2015-11-13
Reviewed revision 10 (document currently at 11)
Result Almost Ready
Completed 2015-11-13
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Document: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2015-11-13
IETF LC End Date: 2015-11-24
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary:  Almost Ready


Major Concerns: None


Minor Concerns:

Sections 4.1 and 5.3.1 inclues a reference to [802.1Q-2011].  Should
this be the 2014 version of the document?  If not, please add the
informative reference for [802.1Q-2011].


Other Editorial Comments:

The Abstract should appear on the title page.

Section 3 needs a reference for MEF 6.1:
s/Specification MEF 6.1/Specification MEF 6.1 [MEF6.1]/
Also, [MEF6.1] needs to be added as a normative reference.

Section 3 needs a reference for IEEE 802.1Q-2003:
s/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003 [802.1Q-2003]/
Also, please add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003].

Third level section headings do not have space between the section
number and the section title.  For example:
s/5.3.1.PW Processing/5.3.1. PW Processing/

In Fig 4, there is room to shift the figure to the right, this will
allow the "AC" labels to fit better on the left:

              +----------------------------------------+
              |           VPLS-capable PE model        |
              |   +---------------+          +------+  |
              |   |               |==========|TVSI-1|------------
   +---+  AC  |   |               ------------      |------------ PWs
   |CE |----------|     Bridge    ------------      |------------
   +---+      |   |               | Root &   +------+  |
              |   |     Module    | Leaf VLAN   o      |
              |   |               |             o      |
              |   |               |             o      |
              |   |               |             o      |
              |   |               |             o      |
   +---+  AC  |   |               |   VLAN-n +------+  |
   |CE |----------|               ------------VSI-n |-------------
   +---+      |   |               |==========|      |------------- PWs
              |   |               |     ^    |      |-------------
              |   +---------------+     |    +------+  |
              |                         |              |
              +-------------------------|--------------+
                            LAN emulation Interface

          Figure 4  A VPLS PE Model for E-Tree with a Single T-VSI