Last Call Review of draft-ietf-mmusic-mux-exclusive-08
review-ietf-mmusic-mux-exclusive-08-genart-lc-dupont-2016-07-11-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-mmusic-mux-exclusive
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 12)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2016-07-08
Requested 2016-06-30
Authors Christer Holmberg
Draft last updated 2016-07-11
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -08 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -08 by Scott Kelly (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -04 by Tim Wicinski (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Francis Dupont
State Completed
Review review-ietf-mmusic-mux-exclusive-08-genart-lc-dupont-2016-07-11
Reviewed rev. 08 (document currently at 12)
Review result Ready
Review completed: 2016-07-11

Review
review-ietf-mmusic-mux-exclusive-08-genart-lc-dupont-2016-07-11

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Document: draft-ietf-mmusic-mux-exclusive-08.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20160707
IETF LC End Date: 20160708
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - 4.4 page 5: I am not sure that "The offerer might e.g. send a new offer"
  is correct (i.e., is a comma required? where?) I leave this to
  the RFC Editor...

 - 5.2 page 6 and 5.3 page 7: I'd like to get titles on same pages than
  updates. IMHO it is an unwanted side-effect of a device which forces
  OLD nd NEW TEXTs to be on same pages. Something else for teh RFC Editor...

 - 5.2 page 7: my spell checker complains about signalled but as it is
  in the OLD TEXT there is no serious reasons to not get it in the NEW one.

 - 5.3 page 8: "a=candidiate:" -> "a=candidate:"

Regards 

Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr