Telechat Review of draft-ietf-netmod-entity-07
review-ietf-netmod-entity-07-genart-telechat-shirazipour-2018-01-11-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-netmod-entity
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 08)
Type Telechat Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2018-01-09
Requested 2017-12-21
Other Reviews Yangdoctors Last Call review of -07 by Radek Krejčí (diff)
Secdir Telechat review of -07 by Shawn Emery (diff)
Review State Completed
Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
Review review-ietf-netmod-entity-07-genart-telechat-shirazipour-2018-01-11
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/aREuqPjkym1Tw_a77w63XlQ_Eck
Reviewed rev. 07 (document currently at 08)
Review result Ready with Nits
Draft last updated 2018-01-11
Review completed: 2018-01-11

Review
review-ietf-netmod-entity-07-genart-telechat-shirazipour-2018-01-11

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Document: draft-ietf-netmod-entity-07
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2017-12-22
IETF LC End Date: NA
IESG Telechat date: 2018-01-09

Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track  RFC.

Major issues:
Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:
-Many occurrences : "an sensor"--->"a sensor"
-Although mentioned in Section 9, it would be good for context setting to also add similar text to Intro or Abstract Section:
"
The YANG modules specified in this document define a schema for data
   that is designed to be accessed via network management protocols such
   as NETCONF [RFC6241] or RESTCONF [RFC8040].

"


Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
www.ericsson.com