Telechat Review of draft-ietf-netmod-entity-07
review-ietf-netmod-entity-07-genart-telechat-shirazipour-2018-01-11-00
| Request | Review of | draft-ietf-netmod-entity |
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| Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 08) | |
| Type | Telechat Review | |
| Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
| Deadline | 2018-01-09 | |
| Requested | 2017-12-21 | |
| Authors | Andy Bierman , Martin Björklund , Jie Dong , Dan Romascanu | |
| Draft last updated | 2018-01-11 | |
| Completed reviews |
Yangdoctors Last Call review of -07
by
Radek Krejčí
(diff)
Genart Telechat review of -07 by Meral Shirazipour (diff) Secdir Telechat review of -07 by Shawn M Emery (diff) |
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| Assignment | Reviewer | Meral Shirazipour |
| State | Completed | |
| Review |
review-ietf-netmod-entity-07-genart-telechat-shirazipour-2018-01-11
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| Reviewed revision | 07 (document currently at 08) | |
| Result | Ready with Nits | |
| Completed | 2018-01-11 |
review-ietf-netmod-entity-07-genart-telechat-shirazipour-2018-01-11-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-netmod-entity-07 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2017-12-22 IETF LC End Date: NA IESG Telechat date: 2018-01-09 Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC. Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: -Many occurrences : "an sensor"--->"a sensor" -Although mentioned in Section 9, it would be good for context setting to also add similar text to Intro or Abstract Section: " The YANG modules specified in this document define a schema for data that is designed to be accessed via network management protocols such as NETCONF [RFC6241] or RESTCONF [RFC8040]. " Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com