Last Call Review of draft-ietf-tictoc-ptp-enterprise-profile-24
review-ietf-tictoc-ptp-enterprise-profile-24-genart-lc-hares-2024-03-04-00

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Document: draft-ietf-tictoc-ptp-enterprise-profile-??
Reviewer: Susan Hares
Review Date: 2024-03-04
IETF LC End Date: 2024-03-05
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: I want to thank the authors for carefully adjusting the technical
document to the new terms.

Major issues: none

Minor issues: none

Nits/editorial comments:  English language editorial nits.

Nit #1: in Section 6, last paragraph, sentence five beginning with "Security
problems".

old text:/
Security problems include on-path attacks such as
delay attacks, packet interception / manipulation attacks.
/

New text:
Security problems include on-path attacks such as
delay attacks, packet interception, or manipulation attacks.
/

#Nit2 in Section 8, paragraph 3, sentence 1

Old text:/In PTP Networks that contain Transparent Clocks, time Transmitters
might receive Delay messages that no longer contains the IP
Addresses of Time Receivers./

change /contains/ to /contain/ - for agreement of plural subject to plural verb.

#Nit 3, section 8, paragraph 3, sentence 2, incorrect spelling

Wo "becuase" should be "because".