Last Call Review of draft-ietf-tictoc-ptp-enterprise-profile-24
review-ietf-tictoc-ptp-enterprise-profile-24-genart-lc-hares-2024-03-04-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-tictoc-ptp-enterprise-profile
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 28)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2024-03-05
Requested 2024-02-20
Authors Douglas Arnold , Heiko Gerstung
I-D last updated 2024-03-04
Completed reviews Intdir Telechat review of -26 by Tommy Pauly (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -24 by Tero Kivinen (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -24 by Susan Hares (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -24 by Tim Chown (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Susan Hares
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-tictoc-ptp-enterprise-profile by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/r4Am6hNg7lrfe42IUqHxgeZbhRA
Reviewed revision 24 (document currently at 28)
Result Ready w/nits
Completed 2024-03-04
review-ietf-tictoc-ptp-enterprise-profile-24-genart-lc-hares-2024-03-04-00
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Document: draft-ietf-tictoc-ptp-enterprise-profile-??
Reviewer: Susan Hares
Review Date: 2024-03-04
IETF LC End Date: 2024-03-05
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: I want to thank the authors for carefully adjusting the technical
document to the new terms.

Major issues: none

Minor issues: none

Nits/editorial comments:  English language editorial nits.

Nit #1: in Section 6, last paragraph, sentence five beginning with "Security
problems".

old text:/
Security problems include on-path attacks such as
delay attacks, packet interception / manipulation attacks.
/

New text:
Security problems include on-path attacks such as
delay attacks, packet interception, or manipulation attacks.
/

#Nit2 in Section 8, paragraph 3, sentence 1

Old text:/In PTP Networks that contain Transparent Clocks, time Transmitters
might receive Delay messages that no longer contains the IP
Addresses of Time Receivers./

change /contains/ to /contain/ - for agreement of plural subject to plural verb.

#Nit 3, section 8, paragraph 3, sentence 2, incorrect spelling

Wo "becuase" should be "because".