Security Threats to Network-Based Localized Mobility Management (NETLMM)
draft-ietf-netlmm-threats-04

Grammar nits from Gen-ART review by  Francis Dupont:
Section 3.1 page 8:

 - can to trick -> can trick
 - a variety of ... which make mouting -> makes? mounting
                                              ^     ^
   (if someone finds the answer for the grammar point in the web,
    can (s)he give a pointer? I've based my comment on French,
    perhaps English is different. BTW "a large number of" is plural
    without question).

[BC - I believe I could parse this text either way.
As written, "which" refers to "barriers"; if it was
"makes", then "which" would refer to "variety. Anyway,let's
leave it to the Editor.]

 - both on-link and off-link -> either on-link or off-link?

  From the SecDire Review by Charles Clancy:
  >
  > Overall, I think the draft provides an exhaustive list of possible 
  > security threats at every link in the chain.
  >
  > My biggest complaint with security analysis drafts of this nature is 
  > that they don't put the threats into context of actual attacker goals. 
  > In general, attackers don't want to inject traffic into some secured 
  > link for the sake of doing it.  They do it because it facilitates some 
  > larger goal, to include theft of network access, denial of access to 
  > others, or compromise of confidential data.  Perhaps it's just a matter 
  > of organization.  But, I think it would be useful to add a description 
  > of some of these higher-level attacker goals, and how all the 
  > already-described, very specific attacks can facilitate these larger 
  > attacker goals.