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Last Call Review of draft-dawkins-iesg-nomcom-advisor-iaoc-03
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Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 03)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2017-10-16
Requested 2017-09-18
Authors Spencer Dawkins
I-D last updated 2017-10-09
Completed reviews Secdir Last Call review of -03 by Yaron Sheffer
Genart Last Call review of -03 by Francis Dupont
Assignment Reviewer Francis Dupont
State Completed
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Reviewed revision 03
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Completed 2017-10-09
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Document: draft-dawkins-iesg-nomcom-advisor-iaoc-03.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20170929
IETF LC End Date: 20171016
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments: 
 - ToC page 2 and 7 page 4: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - about A.1 page 5: I agree it can be critical to have flexibility
  in the text establishing rules. As you know the French law is
  fully written down so this principle verifies each time a new
  question happens. For instance the first time a judge had to decide
  about software ownership he asked how a program was presented and
  simply applied the law about texts even a program is not a novel
  because the law about texts is about texts in general. Of course
  this was changed by dedicated laws a few years after (unfortunately
  because the author of a text has a lot of rights, i.e. it was pretty
  good for programmers).

 - A.2 page 6: in [RFC7437],Section 4.6
                            ^ add a space after the comma

 - A.3 page 7: sufficent -> sufficient and qualiified -> qualified

Regards

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr