Early Review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb-18
review-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb-18-genart-early-knodel-2023-11-16-00
Request | Review of | draft-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb |
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Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 21) | |
Type | Early Review | |
Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
Deadline | 2023-11-17 | |
Requested | 2023-10-18 | |
Requested by | Stephane Litkowski | |
Authors | Neeraj Malhotra , Ali Sajassi , Jorge Rabadan , John Drake , Avinash Reddy Lingala , Samir Thoria | |
I-D last updated | 2023-11-16 | |
Completed reviews |
Rtgdir Early review of -18
by Dhruv Dhody
(diff)
Genart Early review of -18 by Mallory Knodel (diff) |
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Assignment | Reviewer | Mallory Knodel |
State | Completed | |
Request | Early review on draft-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
Posted at | https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/FhRb2ssbcfp1AJtOT06MyjJghC0 | |
Reviewed revision | 18 (document currently at 21) | |
Result | Ready w/issues | |
Completed | 2023-11-16 |
review-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb-18-genart-early-knodel-2023-11-16-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. Please resolve these comments along with any other comments you may receive. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://wiki.ietf.org/en/group/gen/GenArtFAQ>. Document: draft-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb Reviewer: Mallory Knodel Review Date: 16 Nov 2023 Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should be fixed before publication. Major issues: Section 3 as the Solution Overview seems out of step with the remaining sections in that it properly describes the relationships between 4, 5 and 6, but it appears that 7-10 are additional over arching considerations that might benefit from being extracted from the discussion of direct solutions. Suggesting perhaps that 4, 5 and 6 be treated under the solution space, whereas the remaining substantive sections 7-10 be presented as additional considerations and tradeoffs but not direct descriptions of full solutions to the problems outlined in the introduction. Minor issues: Not all acronyms are properly expanded in order of their first-time use which hinders readability. Seems 12. Operational Considerations is superfluous and plenty of document dependencies also do not have this section. Nits/editorial comments: The focus of my review did not expose any nits/editorial comments though I believe there are some that have persisted across the various versions that I compared and I would encourage the authors to do a full copy edit ahead of IESG submission.