Last Call Review of draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-evpn-aggregation-label-10
review-ietf-bess-mvpn-evpn-aggregation-label-10-genart-lc-housley-2023-06-30-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-evpn-aggregation-label
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 14)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2023-07-12
Requested 2023-06-28
Authors Zhaohui (Jeffrey) Zhang , Eric C. Rosen , Wen Lin , Zhenbin Li , IJsbrand Wijnands
I-D last updated 2023-06-30
Completed reviews Secdir Last Call review of -10 by Robert Sparks (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -10 by Menachem Dodge (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -10 by Russ Housley (diff)
Rtgdir Last Call review of -08 by Tony Przygienda (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Russ Housley
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-evpn-aggregation-label by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/3fAtK3w0wRrSeNCGgzBnr86jTRU
Reviewed revision 10 (document currently at 14)
Result Almost ready
Completed 2023-06-30
review-ietf-bess-mvpn-evpn-aggregation-label-10-genart-lc-housley-2023-06-30-00
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Document: draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-evpn-aggregation-label-10
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2023-06-30
IETF LC End Date: 2023-07-12
IESG Telechat date: unknown


Summary: Almost Ready


Major Concerns: None.


Minor Concerns:

Section 2.2: Please provide more discussion of "central authority".  I
do not think that a Internet-wide authority is required to meet this
requirement.  I think that the authority needs to be recognized
throughout a provider network.


Nits:

Section 1: please avoid splitting "I/S-PMSI" across multiple lines.

Section 2: s/ingress PE's default label space/default label space/

Section 2: s/packet's ingress PE/ingress PE of the packet/

Section 2.2.2.1: s/Route-2 respectively/Route-2, respectively/

Section 3.2: s/PTA's Label field/label field of the PTA/

Section 3.2: s/source PE's label space/label space of the source PE/

Section 4: s/third party's label space/label space of a third party/ (2 places)

Section 4: please spell out "LFIBs"; this term is not in the definitions.