Last Call Review of draft-ietf-dmm-lma-controlled-mag-params-03

Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Title Last Call Review of draft-ietf-dmm-lma-controlled-mag-params-03
Request Last Call - requested 2017-02-10
Reviewer Francis Dupont
Review result Ready
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Last updated 2017-02-27


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Document: draft-ietf-dmm-lma-controlled-mag-params-03.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20170217
IETF LC End Date: 20170224
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments: 
 - ToC page 2 and 9 (title) page 8: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 1 page 2: you must expand the abbrevs at first use in the body of
  the document: the abstract is not a part of the body.

 - 1 page 2: singaling -> signaling

 - 3 page 3: suboptions -> sub-options
  (because the dash was at all other uses)

 - 3 page 4: the wording "The sub-options are optional" is ambiguous:
  it can mean that there is no mandatory sub-options or that the
  field can be empty. Obviously it is the first according to the
  section 3 intro "MUST contain one or more".

 - 3.1 page 4: Binding Refresh Control Sub-Option ->
  Binding Re-registration Control Sub-Option
  (it is the official name of the option cf section 6)

 - authors' addresses page 12: China -> P.R. China or ISO 3166 CN
  BTW I have a question about the "Kansas": I can understand
  to put only the state for California or Texas but Kansas? (:-)