Telechat Review of draft-ietf-dnssd-srp-22
review-ietf-dnssd-srp-22-intdir-telechat-combes-2023-08-03-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-dnssd-srp
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 25)
Type Telechat Review
Team Internet Area Directorate (intdir)
Deadline 2023-08-04
Requested 2023-07-12
Requested by Éric Vyncke
Authors Ted Lemon , Stuart Cheshire
I-D last updated 2023-08-03
Completed reviews Dnsdir Telechat review of -23 by Anthony Somerset (diff)
Dnsdir Last Call review of -20 by Anthony Somerset (diff)
Artart Last Call review of -20 by Patrik Fältström (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -20 by Joey Salazar (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -20 by Dhruv Dhody (diff)
Tsvart Last Call review of -20 by Joerg Ott (diff)
Dnsdir Telechat review of -22 by Anthony Somerset (diff)
Iotdir Telechat review of -22 by Christian Amsüss (diff)
Intdir Telechat review of -22 by Jean-Michel Combes (diff)
Secdir Telechat review of -23 by Joey Salazar (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Jean-Michel Combes
State Completed
Request Telechat review on draft-ietf-dnssd-srp by Internet Area Directorate Assigned
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/int-dir/BdZy_wNays_5TUG9iAs2m12ZneU
Reviewed revision 22 (document currently at 25)
Result Ready w/nits
Completed 2023-08-03
review-ietf-dnssd-srp-22-intdir-telechat-combes-2023-08-03-00
Hi,

I am an assigned INT directorate reviewer for draft-ietf-dnssd-srp-22. These
comments were written primarily for the benefit of the Internet Area Directors.
Document editors and shepherd(s) should treat these comments just like they
would treat comments from any other IETF contributors and resolve them along
with any other Last Call comments that have been received. For more details on
the INT Directorate, see https://datatracker.ietf.org/group/intdir/about/
<https://datatracker.ietf.org/group/intdir/about/>.

Based on my review, the document IS ready to go to IETF Last Call and therefore
CAN be forwarded to the IESG

The following are minor issues (typos, misspelling, minor text improvements)
with the document:

3.3.1.3.  Host Description Instruction

   A and/or AAAA records that are not of of sufficient scope to be
   validly published in a DNS zone can be ignored by the SRP server,
   which could result in a host description effectively containing zero
   reachable addresses even when it contains one or more addresses.

<JMC>
s/... that are not of of sufficient scope .../... that are not of sufficient
scope ... </JMC>

Best regards,

JMC.