Last Call Review of draft-ietf-dtn-ipn-update-09
review-ietf-dtn-ipn-update-09-opsdir-lc-wicinski-2024-02-13-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-dtn-ipn-update
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 10)
Type Last Call Review
Team Ops Directorate (opsdir)
Deadline 2024-02-12
Requested 2024-01-29
Authors Rick Taylor , Edward J. Birrane
I-D last updated 2024-02-13
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -09 by Russ Housley (diff)
Artart Last Call review of -09 by Marco Tiloca (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -09 by Tim Wicinski (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Tim Wicinski
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-dtn-ipn-update by Ops Directorate Assigned
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/ops-dir/lnF4E-2BzZtsbdks-05pmaFAEak
Reviewed revision 09 (document currently at 10)
Result Has nits
Completed 2024-02-13
review-ietf-dtn-ipn-update-09-opsdir-lc-wicinski-2024-02-13-00
I have reviewed this document as part of the Operational directorate's ongoing
effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG.  These
comments were written with the intent of improving the operational aspects of
the IETF drafts. Comments that are not addressed in last call may be included
in AD reviews during the IESG review.  Document editors and WG chairs should
treat these comments just like any other last call comments.

I am in agree with Russ Housley's genart comments and wish to see those
resolved.

Section 9.1 and 9.3 of the IANA considerations refer to the "Example Range"
assigned for use in examples in documentation.  This document should have
examples included - perhaps as an appendix.  I am always one to want good
examples and bad examples.