Last Call Review of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis-05
review-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis-05-genart-lc-yee-2019-08-04-00
Request | Review of | draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis |
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Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 08) | |
Type | Last Call Review | |
Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
Deadline | 2019-08-05 | |
Requested | 2019-07-08 | |
Authors | Gonzalo Camarillo , Jason Livingood | |
I-D last updated | 2019-08-04 | |
Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -05
by Peter E. Yee
(diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -05 by Hilarie Orman (diff) |
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Assignment | Reviewer | Peter E. Yee |
State | Completed | |
Request | Last Call review on draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
Posted at | https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/Y4RRjWRLgZFx-iDWxLKVS9Cq99o | |
Reviewed revision | 05 (document currently at 08) | |
Result | Ready w/nits | |
Completed | 2019-08-04 |
review-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis-05-genart-lc-yee-2019-08-04-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis-05 Reviewer: Peter Yee Review Date: 2019-08-04 IETF LC End Date: 2019-08-05 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: This draft updates RFC 2031 (The IETF-ISOC Relationship) in light of the IASA2 changes. To the extent of that I've followed these changes, the draft appears to capture my understanding of the current relationship, at least as it is envisaged by the two parties. Whether that's how things really operate could probably be the subject of an extensive debate on the IETF mailing list. ;-) [Ready with nits] Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: Page 3, last paragraph before section 2, first sentence: delete a redundant "the". Page 3, last paragraph before section 2, last sentence: remove the spaces in "IETF - ISOC". Page 5, section 6, first paragraph, first sentence: change "The" to "the". As far as I can tell the ISOC's official name is "Internet Society" without a capitalized "The" and uses "the" when using the name in sentences. Page 5, section 6, second paragraph, last sentence: change "board of trustees" to "Board of Trustees" to match ISOC's usage. Page 5, section 7, first paragraph, third sentence: change "board of trustees" to "Board of Trustees". Page 5, section 7, first paragraph, last sentence: change "arms length" to "arm's length".