Last Call Review of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis-05
review-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis-05-genart-lc-yee-2019-08-04-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 05)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2019-08-05
Requested 2019-07-08
Draft last updated 2019-08-04
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -05 by Peter Yee
Secdir Last Call review of -05 by Hilarie Orman
Assignment Reviewer Peter Yee
State Completed
Review review-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis-05-genart-lc-yee-2019-08-04
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/Y4RRjWRLgZFx-iDWxLKVS9Cq99o
Reviewed rev. 05
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2019-08-04

Review
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Document: draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc2031bis-05
Reviewer: Peter Yee
Review Date: 2019-08-04
IETF LC End Date: 2019-08-05
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: This draft updates RFC 2031 (The IETF-ISOC Relationship) in light of the IASA2 changes.  To the extent of that I've followed these changes, the draft appears to capture my understanding of the current relationship, at least as it is envisaged by the two parties.  Whether that's how things really operate could probably be the subject of an extensive debate on the IETF mailing list. ;-)  [Ready with nits]

Major issues:  None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:

Page 3, last paragraph before section 2, first sentence: delete a redundant "the".

Page 3, last paragraph before section 2, last sentence: remove the spaces in "IETF - ISOC".

Page 5, section 6, first paragraph, first sentence: change "The" to "the".  As far as I can tell the ISOC's official name is "Internet Society" without a capitalized "The" and uses "the" when using the name in sentences.

Page 5, section 6, second paragraph, last sentence: change "board of trustees" to "Board of Trustees" to match ISOC's usage.

Page 5, section 7, first paragraph, third sentence: change "board of trustees" to "Board of Trustees".

Page 5, section 7, first paragraph, last sentence: change "arms length" to "arm's length".