Last Call Review of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc7437bis-05
review-ietf-iasa2-rfc7437bis-05-genart-lc-davies-2019-06-20-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc7437bis
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 09)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2019-06-21
Requested 2019-06-07
Authors Murray Kucherawy, Bob Hinden, Jason Livingood
Draft last updated 2019-06-20
Completed reviews Rtgdir Last Call review of -07 by Geoff Huston (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -05 by Elwyn Davies (diff)
Secdir Telechat review of -08 by Russ Mundy (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Elwyn Davies 
State Completed
Review review-ietf-iasa2-rfc7437bis-05-genart-lc-davies-2019-06-20
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/djlrxeqK3sR9-khczkPer0RY9pI
Reviewed rev. 05 (document currently at 09)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2019-06-20

Review
review-ietf-iasa2-rfc7437bis-05-genart-lc-davies-2019-06-20

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Document: draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc7437bis-05
Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
Review Date: 2019-06-20
IETF LC End Date: 2019-06-21
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: Ready with nits

Major Issues:

None

Minor Issues:

s3.2, para 1 and para 7: I feel the phrase 'superior candidate' is rather demeaning to an incumbent who may have served with distinction. Suggest in para 1 s/a superior candidate/an alternative candidate/. In para 7 s/A superior candidate  is one who the NomCom believes/The nominated candidate selected for each open position by theNomCom, whether incumbent or alternative,  is the one that they believe/

Nits and Editorials:

s2, Confirmed Candidate: s/that has been/who has been/ (for consistency with Candidate)

s3.2, para 1: s/its incumbent/its incumbent, assuming that the incumbent has indicated willingness to continue in post,/

s3.2, para 2: Section 5.4 of draft-ietf-iasa2-rfc4071bis-04 indicates that there are term limits for the IETF LLC board positions and Section 2 of draft-ietf-iasa2-trust-update-02 indicates there are term limits for IETF Trust positions.

s3.3, para 3: s/is selected/are selected/

s3.7.1: The summaries of expertise need to be made public to facilitate candidate's ability to address the requirements in their submissions to the NomCom and for others to make appropriate comments on candidates.