Last Call Review of draft-ietf-ippm-ipsec-08
review-ietf-ippm-ipsec-08-genart-lc-shirazipour-2015-02-13-00
| Request | Review of | draft-ietf-ippm-ipsec |
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| Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 11) | |
| Type | Last Call Review | |
| Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
| Deadline | 2015-02-09 | |
| Requested | 2015-01-28 | |
| Authors | Kostas Pentikousis , Emma Zhang , Yang Cui | |
| I-D last updated | 2015-02-13 | |
| Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -08
by Meral Shirazipour
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Genart Telechat review of -09 by Meral Shirazipour (diff) Secdir Last Call review of -08 by Hannes Tschofenig (diff) Secdir Telechat review of -09 by Hannes Tschofenig (diff) Opsdir Last Call review of -08 by Fred Baker (diff) |
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| Assignment | Reviewer | Meral Shirazipour |
| State | Completed | |
| Request | Last Call review on draft-ietf-ippm-ipsec by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
| Reviewed revision | 08 (document currently at 11) | |
| Result | Ready w/nits | |
| Completed | 2015-02-13 |
review-ietf-ippm-ipsec-08-genart-lc-shirazipour-2015-02-13-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-ippm-ipsec-08 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2015-02-07 IETF LC End Date: 2015-02-09 IESG Telechat date: NA Summary: This draft is ready to be published as a Standards Track RFC, but I have some small comments. Nits/editorial comments: -[Page 4], Section 1, last two paragraphs: Although the draft always refers to O/TWAMP, this sections says : "This document specifies a method for enabling network measurements between a TWAMP client and a TWAMP server " The reason the O/ was omitted is explained in Section 3. A sentence should be added in section 1 at least mentioning that as described in Section 3 this document is valid mostly for TWAMP. -[general]: Suggestion to spell out all acronyms at first use, even in abstract. e.g.: O/TWAMP, IKE, SA, SeGW, eNB( By SeGW do we mean serving gateway? or security GW?), AH, ESP, IV etc... Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com