Telechat Review of draft-ietf-ippm-testplan-rfc2679-
review-ietf-ippm-testplan-rfc2679-genart-telechat-carpenter-2012-08-24-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-ippm-testplan-rfc2679
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 03)
Type Telechat Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2012-08-28
Requested 2012-08-20
Authors Len Ciavattone, Ruediger Geib, Al Morton, Matthias Wieser
Draft last updated 2012-08-24
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -?? by Brian Carpenter
Genart Telechat review of -?? by Brian Carpenter
Assignment Reviewer Brian Carpenter 
State Completed
Review review-ietf-ippm-testplan-rfc2679-genart-telechat-carpenter-2012-08-24
Review result Almost Ready
Review completed: 2012-08-24

Review
review-ietf-ippm-testplan-rfc2679-genart-telechat-carpenter-2012-08-24

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Document: draft-ietf-ippm-testplan-rfc2679-02.txt
Reviewer: Brian Carpenter
Review Date: 2012-08-24
IETF LC End Date: 2012-08-14
IESG Telechat date: 2012-08-30

Summary:  Almost ready
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Note: The unpublished -03 draft deals with all my comments below.
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Significant issues:
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At the end of section 6:

>   Only the Type-P-One-way-Delay-Inverse-Percentile has been ignored in
>   both implementations, so it is a candidate for removal in RFC2679bis.

What is this telling us? That RFC 2769 isn't ready for advancement?
Or that this is the only discrepancy and can be safely ignored?

In fact, what is the overall conclusion? I was really expecting to find
a summary and conclusion at the end of the document. The Abstract says
that the draft proposes advancement, but the body of the text doesn't
actually say that anywhere that I noticed.

Nits:
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> o  Test duration = 300 seconds (March 29)

This and other dates should include the year.

There's one erratum against RFC 2679. While it's trivial, according to the
criteria in RFC 6410, it should be reviewed. One sentence would be enough.