Last Call Review of draft-ietf-ippm-twamp-time-format-03
review-ietf-ippm-twamp-time-format-03-genart-lc-halpern-2017-03-02-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-ippm-twamp-time-format
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 06)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2017-03-15
Requested 2017-02-27
Other Reviews Opsdir Last Call review of -05 by Jon Mitchell (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -04 by Chris Lonvick (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -04 by Joel Halpern (diff)
Review State Completed
Reviewer Joel Halpern
Review review-ietf-ippm-twamp-time-format-03-genart-lc-halpern-2017-03-02
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/TQBEvp7fWWZQ1qPcdygt81bvx64
Reviewed rev. 03 (document currently at 06)
Review result Ready with Nits
Draft last updated 2017-03-02
Review closed: 2017-03-02

Review
review-ietf-ippm-twamp-time-format-03-genart-lc-halpern-2017-03-02

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Document: draft-ietf-ippm-twamp-time-format-??
Reviewer: Joel Halpern
Review Date: 2017-03-02
IETF LC End Date: 2017-03-15
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary:

Major issues:

Minor issues:
    The wording of the behavioral requirements for signaling in section 2.1 is atypical for IETF documents (and in my view makes it harder for the reader to follow.)  The rules are listed as separate rules, but they are actually sequential steps that must be test in order, exiting the process if the condition for each step is met.  But it does not actually say that.  

Nits/editorial comments: 
    Section 2.3 refers to this as a proposal.  It is a specification, not a proposal.  Please reword.