Last Call Review of draft-ietf-ipsecme-ikev2-rename-esn-02
review-ietf-ipsecme-ikev2-rename-esn-02-artart-lc-salz-2025-01-06-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-ipsecme-ikev2-rename-esn
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 05)
Type IETF Last Call Review
Team ART Area Review Team (artart)
Deadline 2025-01-13
Requested 2024-12-30
Authors Valery Smyslov
I-D last updated 2025-11-05 (Latest revision 2025-03-16)
Completed reviews Artart IETF Last Call review of -02 by Rich Salz (diff)
Secdir Telechat review of -03 by Derrell Piper (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Rich Salz
State Completed
Request IETF Last Call review on draft-ietf-ipsecme-ikev2-rename-esn by ART Area Review Team Assigned
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/art/phuIqKMzMqIhsMb6rN3CFkKi4rA
Reviewed revision 02 (document currently at 05)
Result Ready
Completed 2025-01-06
review-ietf-ipsecme-ikev2-rename-esn-02-artart-lc-salz-2025-01-06-00
I'm the ARTART reviewer for this document. The kinds of things this directorate
looks for are described at https://wiki.ietf.org/group/art/TypicalARTAreaIssues

I found this wording initially confusing: "the sender in accordance with AH
([RFC4302] Section 3.3.2) and ESP ([RFC4303] Section 3.3.3) specifications" I
suggest "the sender in accordance with the specifications for AH ([RFC4302]
Section 3.3.2) and ESP ([RFC4303] Section 3.3.3) ..." That aside, I found the
Introduction incredibly useful background information, thank you.

I found nothing of concern otherwise.