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Request Review of draft-ietf-karp-threats-reqs
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Type Telechat Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2012-07-17
Requested 2012-07-05
Authors Gregory M. Lebovitz , Manav Bhatia , Brian Weis
I-D last updated 2012-07-18
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Assignment Reviewer Vijay K. Gurbani
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Document: draft-ietf-karp-threats-reqs-05
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: Jul-18-2012
IETF LC End Date: Unknown
IESG Telechat date: Jul-19-2012

Summary: This draft is ready as an Informational.

Major: 0
Minor: 0
Nits: 4

Nits:
- S1, last paragraph has a spurious ":
 s/in their usage."/in their usage.
- S1.1, in the description of Traffic Key: the second sentence is
 a run on sentence and could do with an extra comma (,) as follows:
 s/device configuration no data/device configuration, no data/
- S2.2, first paragraph:
 s/yet-best- security-possible/yet-best-security-possible/
- S3.2, under "INFERENCE", there are six sub-bullets.  The labels
 on all of them except the last one are capitalized.  Any reason
 for the discrepancy?

Thanks,

- vijay
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