Last Call Review of draft-ietf-kitten-cammac-04
review-ietf-kitten-cammac-04-genart-lc-shirazipour-2015-12-03-00

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Document: draft-ietf-kitten-cammac-04

Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour

Review Date: 2015-12-02

IETF LC End Date:  2015-12-04 (2

nd

 LC)

IESG Telechat date: 2015-12-17





Summary:

This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some
comments/nits.



Major issues:



Minor issues:



Nits/editorial comments:

[Page 3] 2nd and 3rd paragraph: The word "service" is used to designate both
the proxy-service and the second backend "application-service" as per [MS-SFU].
This may confuse the reader at first read.

Suggestion would be to use "proxy-service" and "application-service". [Page 8]
after point "2." would also benefit from clearer use of these terms.



[Page 8], last paragraph, it was not clear to me if  "service principal" is the
"application service"?



Best Regards,

Meral

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Meral Shirazipour

Ericsson

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