Last Call Review of draft-ietf-mboned-auto-multicast-14
review-ietf-mboned-auto-multicast-14-genart-lc-barnes-2012-12-14-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-mboned-auto-multicast
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 18)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2012-12-19
Requested 2012-12-06
Draft last updated 2012-12-14
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -14 by Mary Barnes (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -17 by Alexey Melnikov (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -17 by Alexey Melnikov (diff)
Tsvdir Telechat review of -14 by Magnus Westerlund (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Mary Barnes
State Completed
Review review-ietf-mboned-auto-multicast-14-genart-lc-barnes-2012-12-14
Reviewed rev. 14 (document currently at 18)
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2012-12-14

Review
review-ietf-mboned-auto-multicast-14-genart-lc-barnes-2012-12-14

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Document: draft-ietf-mboned-auto-multicast-14
Reviewer:  Mary Barnes
Review Date:  14 Dec 2012
IETF LC End Date: 19 Dec 2012

Summary:  Ready with comment/nits.

Minor comments:
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References:
- There is a normative downref to RFC 1321.  Does this need to be a
normative reference? Note, I could not find the shepherd write-up in
the tracker to see if this had been noted and explained.

Nits:
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IDNITS identifies the following:
- there are 15 instances of two long of lines
- there is an obsolete reference to RFC 2236 (Obsoleted by RFC 3376)
- there are a number of unused references that can likely be removed.

- General: please add #s to all the figures

- Section 4.1.3, 1st sentence: shouldn't "relay services gateways" be
"relay services gateway"

- Appendix A.1, 2nd paragraph:  "Section Section 5.3.6" -> "Section 5.3.6"