Last Call Review of draft-ietf-mboned-auto-multicast-14
review-ietf-mboned-auto-multicast-14-genart-lc-barnes-2012-12-14-00
Request | Review of | draft-ietf-mboned-auto-multicast |
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Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 18) | |
Type | Last Call Review | |
Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
Deadline | 2012-12-19 | |
Requested | 2012-12-06 | |
Authors | Gregory Bumgardner | |
I-D last updated | 2012-12-14 | |
Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -14
by Mary Barnes
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Genart Last Call review of -17 by Alexey Melnikov (diff) Genart Telechat review of -17 by Alexey Melnikov (diff) Tsvdir Telechat review of -14 by Magnus Westerlund (diff) |
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Assignment | Reviewer | Mary Barnes |
State | Completed | |
Request | Last Call review on draft-ietf-mboned-auto-multicast by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
Reviewed revision | 14 (document currently at 18) | |
Result | Ready w/nits | |
Completed | 2012-12-14 |
review-ietf-mboned-auto-multicast-14-genart-lc-barnes-2012-12-14-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-mboned-auto-multicast-14 Reviewer: Mary Barnes Review Date: 14 Dec 2012 IETF LC End Date: 19 Dec 2012 Summary: Ready with comment/nits. Minor comments: ---------------- References: - There is a normative downref to RFC 1321. Does this need to be a normative reference? Note, I could not find the shepherd write-up in the tracker to see if this had been noted and explained. Nits: ----- IDNITS identifies the following: - there are 15 instances of two long of lines - there is an obsolete reference to RFC 2236 (Obsoleted by RFC 3376) - there are a number of unused references that can likely be removed. - General: please add #s to all the figures - Section 4.1.3, 1st sentence: shouldn't "relay services gateways" be "relay services gateway" - Appendix A.1, 2nd paragraph: "Section Section 5.3.6" -> "Section 5.3.6"