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Request Review of draft-ietf-mboned-ieee802-mcast-problems
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 11)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2019-10-14
Requested 2019-09-30
Authors Charles Perkins, Mike McBride, Dorothy Stanley, Warren Kumari, Juan-Carlos Zúñiga
Draft last updated 2019-10-14
Completed reviews Tsvart Last Call review of -09 by Gorry Fairhurst (diff)
Intdir Last Call review of -09 by Tatuya Jinmei (diff)
Rtgdir Last Call review of -09 by Tal Mizrahi (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -09 by Kyle Rose (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -09 by Pete Resnick (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -11 by Pete Resnick
Opsdir Telechat review of -11 by Dan Romascanu
Tsvart Telechat review of -11 by Gorry Fairhurst
Assignment Reviewer Pete Resnick
State Completed
Review review-ietf-mboned-ieee802-mcast-problems-09-genart-lc-resnick-2019-10-14
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/EdNZfIfy995m7C6PcwBgplLvjNE
Reviewed rev. 09 (document currently at 11)
Review result On the Right Track
Review completed: 2019-10-14

Review
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Document: draft-ietf-mboned-ieee802-mcast-problems-09
Reviewer: Pete Resnick
Review Date: 2019-10-14
IETF LC End Date: 2019-10-14
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary:

This document has good information and analysis of multicast problems and is certainly valuable. However, there are some things in the document which could use clarification or editing.

Major issues:

The first paragraph of section 8 really has too little useful comment. There is no reference for 802.1ak, the reference to 802.1Q is inline instead of in the references section, and the content of neither of these standards is explained in this document. The paragraph doesn't really lay out what the topic of discussion is, at least for someone like myself who is not versed in the topic. I really think this needs to be addressed.

Minor issues:

(Some of these issues are more or less "minor".)

Section 3.1.4 seems a little thin to this non-expert. It is certainly true that "every station has to be configured to wake up to receive the multicast", but it seems like only a poorly designed protocol would create the situation where "the received packet may ultimately be discarded" on any kind of regular basis. If there are a class of packets that the receiver will ultimately discard, that sounds like they should be on a separate multicast address, or the sender should be determining if the packet will be discarded before sending it. Perhaps what this section is driving at is that multicast protocols are often designed without taking power-saving considerations into account, but then *that's* what this section should probably talk about. As it is, it sounds like the old joke about saying to the doctor, "My arm hurts when I do this" and the doctor replying, "The stop doing that".

In section 3.2.1, the last paragraph is missing a bunch of information:
"It's often the first service that operators drop": What is "it"?
"Multicast snooping" is not defined.
In what scenario are devices "registering"?

Section 3.2.2: "This intensifies the impact of multicast messages that are associated to the mobility of a node." I don't understand why. Are you simply saying that as the number of addresses goes up, more discovery packets must be sent?

Section 3.2.4: This seems like more of general problem than a multicast-specific one, and as described it sounds like an attack rather than a poor outcome of a protocol design decision like the rest of the examples. Perhaps framing it that way would make the section clearer.

Section 4.4: Which problem in section 3 is 4.4 supposed to address?

Section 5.1: "...and sometimes the daemons just seem to stop, requiring a restart of the daemon and causing disruption." What a strange thing to say. Does this simply mean "and the current implementations are buggy"?

Also section 5.1: "The distribution of users on wireless networks / subnets changes from one IETF meeting to the next". This document doesn't seem to be about the IETF meeting network. This sentence seems inappropriately specific. The "NAT" and "Stateful firewalls" sections are also overly specific to the IETF meeting network. Generalizing would help.

7: This section seems quite thin, and perhaps unnecessary. The recommendations are implicit in the previous sections.

Nits/editorial comments:

Section 3.2.4: The mention of the face-to-face (probably better: "plenary") meeting seems unnecessary.

Section 5.1: Numbering the subsections would probably be useful.