Telechat Review of draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-07
review-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-07-genart-telechat-black-2013-02-15-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 08)
Type Telechat Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2013-02-19
Requested 2012-08-20
Authors Dinesh Mohan , Dr. Nabil N. Bitar , Ali Sajassi , Simon DeLord , Philippe Niger , Ray (Lei) Qiu
I-D last updated 2013-02-15
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -06 by David L. Black (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -07 by David L. Black (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -?? by Steve Hanna
Assignment Reviewer David L. Black
State Completed
Request Telechat review on draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Reviewed revision 07 (document currently at 08)
Result Ready
Completed 2013-02-15
review-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-07-genart-telechat-black-2013-02-15-00
The -07 version of this draft addresses all of the nits noted in the Gen-ART

review of the -06 version.

 

This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard RFC.

 

Thanks,

--David

 

From:

 Black, David 

Sent:

 Monday, August 20, 2012 9:58 PM

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 dinmohan at hotmail.com; nabil.n.bitar at verizon.com; sajassi at cisco.com; gen-art at ietf.org

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 Black, David; pwe3 at ietf.org; ietf at ietf.org

Subject:

 Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06

 

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please

see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.

Document: 

draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06

Reviewer: David L. Black

Review Date: August 20, 2012

IETF LC End Date: August 20, 2012

Summary:

This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that

should be fixed before publication.

 

This draft covers defect behavior for Ethernet pseudowires,

including defect state mapping and PE defect reporting behavior.

The draft is generally in good shape.  I found a few minor nits.

 

1) The draft uses a lot of acronyms - while each acronym appears to

be expanded on first use, an additional section near the start of the

draft listing all of them would be helpful.

 

2) There's a typo in the first paragraph of section 2:

 

     covers the following Ethernet OAM (Opertaions, Administration and 

 

Opertaions -> Operations.

 

3) The following normative reference is incomplete - please add additional

information that will enable a reader to locate the referenced document:

 

     [MEF16] "Ethernet Local Management Interface", MEF16, January 2006.

 

4) idnits 2.12.13 did not like the pagination:

 

  == The page length should not exceed 58 lines per page, but there was 22

     longer pages, the longest (page 1) being 61 lines

 

Thanks,

--David

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