Last Call Review of draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06
review-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06-genart-lc-black-2012-08-21-00
| Request | Review of | draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk |
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| Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 08) | |
| Type | Last Call Review | |
| Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
| Deadline | 2012-08-27 | |
| Requested | 2012-08-09 | |
| Authors | Dinesh Mohan , Dr. Nabil N. Bitar , Ali Sajassi , Simon DeLord , Philippe Niger , Ray (Lei) Qiu | |
| I-D last updated | 2012-08-21 | |
| Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -06
by David L. Black
(diff)
Genart Telechat review of -07 by David L. Black (diff) Secdir Last Call review of -?? by Steve Hanna |
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| Assignment | Reviewer | David L. Black |
| State | Completed | |
| Request | Last Call review on draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
| Reviewed revision | 06 (document currently at 08) | |
| Result | Ready w/nits | |
| Completed | 2012-08-21 |
review-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06-genart-lc-black-2012-08-21-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06 Reviewer: David L. Black Review Date: August 20, 2012 IETF LC End Date: August 20, 2012 Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should be fixed before publication. This draft covers defect behavior for Ethernet pseudowires , including defect state mapping and PE defect reporting behavior. The draft is generally in good shape. I found a few minor nits. 1) The draft uses a lot of acronyms - while each acronym appears to b e expanded on first use, an additional section near the start of the draft listing all of them would be helpful. 2) There's a typo in the first paragraph of section 2: covers the following Ethernet OAM (Opertaions , Administration and Opertaions -> Operations. 3) The following normative reference is incomplete - please add additional information that will enable a reader to locate the referenced document: [MEF16] "Ethernet Local Management Interface", MEF16, January 2006. 4) idnits 2.12.13 did not like the pagination: == The page length should not exceed 58 lines per page, but there was 22 longer pages, the longest (page 1) being 61 lines Thanks, --David ---------------------------------------------------- David L. Black, Distinguished Engineer EMC Corporation, 176 South St., Hopkinton, MA 01748 +1 (508) 293-7953 FAX: +1 (508) 293-7786 david.black at emc.com Mobile: +1 (978) 394-7754 ----------------------------------------------------