Last Call Review of draft-ietf-tokbind-negotiation-10

Request Review of draft-ietf-tokbind-negotiation
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 14)
Type Last Call Review
Team Ops Directorate (opsdir)
Deadline 2017-11-27
Requested 2017-11-13
Authors Andrei Popov, Magnus Nystrom, Dirk Balfanz, Adam Langley
Draft last updated 2017-12-04
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -10 by Paul Kyzivat (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -10 by Hilarie Orman (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -10 by Will LIU (diff)
Artart Telechat review of -12 by Matthew Miller (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -12 by Paul Kyzivat (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Will LIU 
State Completed
Review review-ietf-tokbind-negotiation-10-opsdir-lc-liu-2017-12-04
Reviewed rev. 10 (document currently at 14)
Review result Ready
Review completed: 2017-12-04


I have reviewed draft-ietf-tokbind-negotiation-10 as part of the Operational directorate's ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG.  These comments were written with the intent of improving the operational aspects of the IETF drafts. Comments that are not addressed in last call may be included in AD reviews during the IESG review.  Document editors and WG chairs should treat these comments just like any other last call comments.

“ This document specifies a Transport Layer Security (TLS) extension for the negotiation of Token Binding protocol version and key

My overall view of the document is 'Ready with Nits' for publication.

Section 3
>   "token_binding_version" contains the lower of:
>  o  the Token Binding protocol version offered by the client in the
>      "token_binding" extension and
>   o  the highest version supported by the server.

"The highest version" means  the highest *Token Binding protocol* version? If yes, please indicate directly to eliminate confusion.

Section 8
>   [I-D.ietf-tokbind-protocol]
>             Popov, A., Nystrom, M., Balfanz, D., Langley, A., and J.
>             Hodges, "The Token Binding Protocol Version 1.0", draft-
>             ietf-tokbind-protocol-15 (work in progress), July 2017.

A later version (-16) should be put here.