Last Call Review of draft-ietf-weirds-object-inventory-05
review-ietf-weirds-object-inventory-05-opsdir-lc-schoenwaelder-2014-10-16-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-weirds-object-inventory
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 06)
Type Last Call Review
Team Ops Directorate (opsdir)
Deadline 2014-10-24
Requested 2014-10-12
Draft last updated 2014-10-16
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -05 by Ben Campbell (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -05 by Leif Johansson (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -05 by Jürgen Schönwälder (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Jürgen Schönwälder
State Completed
Review review-ietf-weirds-object-inventory-05-opsdir-lc-schoenwaelder-2014-10-16
Reviewed rev. 05 (document currently at 06)
Review result Has Nits
Review completed: 2014-10-16

Review
review-ietf-weirds-object-inventory-05-opsdir-lc-schoenwaelder-2014-10-16

Hi,

I have reviewed this document as part of the Operational directorate's
ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the
IESG.  These comments were written primarily for the benefit of the
operational area directors.  Document editors and WG chairs should
treat these comments just like any other last call comments.

This I-D studies the data returned in WHOIS responses. It does not
directly impact the operation of the Internet. It shows that
publically accessible registry information varies but seems to have a
common core. The document likely provides useful background
information for the selection of any standards-track object formats.
I believe the document is read to be published.

Comments:

- In section 3, you may want to be explicit when the information
  was collected, e.g. like below iwth xxx filled in:

  OLD

     WHOIS information, including port 43 response and web response data,
     was collected following the procedures described below.

  NEW

     WHOIS information, including port 43 response and web response data,
     was collected between xxx and xxx following the procedures described 
     below.

  I think this is important since -00 of the individual I-D appeared
  in October 2012 and this means the work already spans two years and
  hence it is unclear when the data was collected.

- Not sure what the '4' in the following sentence means:

   (4)  In accordance with the specification 4 of new gTLD applicant
        guide book [ICANN.AGB-201206] and the Extensible Provisioning
        Protocol (EPP) ([RFC5730], [RFC5731], [RFC5732] and [RFC5733]),
        the response data objects are classified into public and other
        data objects.

/js

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