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Telechat Review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-virtual-eth-segment-13

Request Review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-virtual-eth-segment
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 15)
Type Telechat Review
Team Internet Area Directorate (intdir)
Deadline 2023-07-02
Requested 2023-06-27
Requested by Éric Vyncke
Authors Ali Sajassi , Patrice Brissette , Rick Schell , John Drake , Jorge Rabadan
I-D last updated 2023-09-06
Completed reviews Intdir Telechat review of -13 by Brian Haberman (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -08 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Rtgdir Last Call review of -07 by Jonathan Hardwick (diff)
Sorry for short notice but this I-D has just been added to the IESG telechat...
Assignment Reviewer Brian Haberman
State Completed
Request Telechat review on draft-ietf-bess-evpn-virtual-eth-segment by Internet Area Directorate Assigned
Posted at
Reviewed revision 13 (document currently at 15)
Result Ready w/issues
Completed 2023-09-06
I am an assigned INT directorate reviewer for
draft-ietf-bess-evpn-virtual-eth-segment. These comments were written primarily
for the benefit of the Internet Area Directors. Document editors and
shepherd(s) should treat these comments just like they would treat comments
from any other IETF contributors and resolve them along with any other Last
Call comments that have been received. For more details on the INT Directorate,

Major Issues:

Minor Issues:

* Section 1.2 talks about this document defining extensions for RFCs 7432 and
7623. Should this document formally update those RFCs?

* I am by no means an EVPN expert, so I am curious if there is additional
functionality needed to ensure consistency of ethernet-level configuration
options across the vES (e.g., Max Frame Size) given the mix of technologies


* General
   - There are multiple instances of confusing sentence structure throughout
   the document. Highly recommend getting a native English speaker familiar
   with the technology to make an editorial pass through the document. - Are
   phrases such as "out-of-franchise customer sites" well-known in this

* Abstract
   - Using undefined acronyms in the Abstract is a bit confusing.
   - The second-half of the first sentence is difficult to parse.

* Introduction
   - The first sentence has the same parsing issues as the first sentence in
   the Abstract.