Last Call Review of draft-ietf-bier-ospfv3-extensions-07
review-ietf-bier-ospfv3-extensions-07-genart-lc-knodel-2023-07-11-00

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Document: draft-ietf-bier-ospfv3-extensions-??
Reviewer: Mallory Knodel
Review Date: 2023-07-11
IETF LC End Date: 2023-07-11
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: This document extends another and is very similar in text and
format to other documents that extend the same protocol, except for the
critical text that relates to this particular protocol extension. Therefore for
consistency and readability I think very few changes can or even should be made
other than the incisive changes proposed by the authors. Only three small
editorial suggestions: one is mere copy editing suggestion and the others are
stylistic choices to improve readability.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

 * The acronym "Bit Index Explicit Replication (BIER)" need only be expanded
 once, in the abstract, and therefore the Introduction might start simply with
 "BIER".

 * Parentheticals can be cumbersome for readers, and thus the second sentence
 of Section 2 might instead read, "Within a given BIER domain, a BFR prefix is
 a unique, routable..." It would also be trivial to remove the parenthetical
 statement from the final sentence of section 2.3.

 * While not all acronyms need be expanded, eg BCP, domain-specific acronyms
 can provide more context to the reader. It is not my determination that these
 acronyms are domain specific, eg MPLS is defined in other documents and in
 other IETF working groups. However LSA, TLV, TBD1, BAR, IPA, perhaps are
 specific enough to BIER to warrant expansion the first time they appear.