Last Call Review of draft-ietf-decade-problem-statement-
|Requested revision||No specific revision (document currently at 06)|
|Type||Last Call Review|
|Team||General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)|
|Authors||Haibin Song , Ning Zong , Y. Richard Yang , Richard Alimi|
|I-D last updated||2012-02-26|
Genart Last Call review of -??
by Francis Dupont
Secdir Last Call review of -?? by Leif Johansson
|Request||Last Call review on draft-ietf-decade-problem-statement by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned|
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-decade-problem-statement-05.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20120224 IETF LC End Date: 20120306 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - 1 page 3: P2P and CDN are not in the list of well known abbrevs (IMHO for the first one because P2P means Point-to-Point too) so should be introduced at the first use in the body (and for CDN IMHO as soon as possible, this is why I put this in 1) - 1 page 3: in the networks. -> in networks. ? - 3.1 page 4: IMHO [Internet Study 2008/2009] should be removed to leave only the reference, i.e., [Internet_Study_2008-2009] - 4.1 page 7: 'nor can they manage access' is a wording which could (so should) be improved a bit, IMHO 'nor access' is enough - A pages 11 and 12: e.g. -> e.g., (also at end of line but it is in an appendix 'to be removed by the RFC Editor'...) Regards Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr PS: my dictionary dislikes 'infrastructural'?