Telechat Review of draft-ietf-eman-requirements-11
review-ietf-eman-requirements-11-genart-telechat-dupont-2013-02-07-00
Request | Review of | draft-ietf-eman-requirements |
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Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 14) | |
Type | Telechat Review | |
Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
Deadline | 2013-02-05 | |
Requested | 2013-01-24 | |
Authors | Juergen Quittek , Mouli Chandramouli , Rolf Winter , Thomas Dietz , Benoît Claise | |
I-D last updated | 2013-02-07 | |
Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -10
by Francis Dupont
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Genart Telechat review of -11 by Francis Dupont (diff) Secdir Last Call review of -10 by Magnus Nyström (diff) |
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Assignment | Reviewer | Francis Dupont |
State | Completed | |
Request | Telechat review on draft-ietf-eman-requirements by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
Reviewed revision | 11 (document currently at 14) | |
Result | Ready | |
Completed | 2013-02-07 |
review-ietf-eman-requirements-11-genart-telechat-dupont-2013-02-07-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-eman-requirements-10.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20130125 IETF LC End Date: 20120125 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - ToC page 2: very inconsistent use of caps: I propose to put the first letter of all words in upper cases. And of course apply this to titles (in the very unlikely case the ToC is not auto generated) - ToC page 3 and 11 page 23: Acknowledgements -? Acknowledgments - 1 page 4: IT -> Information Technology - 1 page 4 and others: why Power State and not power state? I believe it comes from a document where you imported the term from? - 12 pages 23 and 24: Telcommunication -> Telecommunication (twice) - Authors' Addresses: please use the full names of countries (surface mail was not yet converted to ISO IS 3166 as far as I know :), so: DE -> Germany IN -> India (or Republic of India?) BE -> Belgium Regards Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr