Last Call Review of draft-ietf-mile-iodef-xmlreg-
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Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2012-05-31
Requested 2012-05-17
Draft last updated 2012-05-31
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -?? by Suresh Krishnan
Secdir Last Call review of -?? by Carl Wallace
Assignment Reviewer Suresh Krishnan
State Completed
Review review-ietf-mile-iodef-xmlreg-genart-lc-krishnan-2012-05-31
Review completed: 2012-05-31

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reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see


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).

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Document: draft-ietf-mile-iodef-xmlreg-01.txt
Reviewer: Suresh Krishnan
Review Date: 2012/06/07
IESG Telechat date: 2012/06/05



Summary: This document is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard 


but I have a comment.




Minor
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* Introduction:



The first sentence is too complex and very difficult to parse. Please 


consider breaking it up. I have proposed some changed text, but feel 


free to ignore if it changes the meaning of what you wanted to convey.




OLD:
IODEF extensions via class extension through AdditionalData and
RecordItem elements, as per section 5.2 of [RFC5070], generally
register their namespaces and schemas with the IANA XML Namespace
registry at 

http://www.iana.org/assignments/xml-registry/ns.html

 and
the IANA XML Schema registry at


http://www.iana.org/assignments/xml-registry/schema.html

,
respectively [RFC3688].

NEW:
The classes of the IODEF data model can be extended by the use of
AdditionalData and RecordItem elements, as per section 5.2 of [RFC5070].


IODEF extensions that use such extended classes register their 


namespaces and schemas with the IANA XML Namespace



registry at 

http://www.iana.org/assignments/xml-registry/ns.html

 and
the IANA XML Schema registry at


http://www.iana.org/assignments/xml-registry/schema.html

,
respectively [RFC3688].


Thanks
Suresh