Last Call Review of draft-ietf-opsawg-tlstm-update-11
review-ietf-opsawg-tlstm-update-11-genart-lc-halpern-2023-02-09-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-opsawg-tlstm-update
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 15)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2023-02-20
Requested 2023-02-06
Authors Kenneth Vaughn
I-D last updated 2023-02-09
Completed reviews Dnsdir Last Call review of -12 by Di Ma (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -11 by Joel M. Halpern (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Joel M. Halpern
State Completed
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Reviewed revision 11 (document currently at 15)
Result Ready
Completed 2023-02-09
review-ietf-opsawg-tlstm-update-11-genart-lc-halpern-2023-02-09-00
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Document: draft-ietf-opsawg-tlstm-update-11
Reviewer: Joel Halpern
Review Date: 2023-02-09
IETF LC End Date: 2023-02-20
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: This document is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard RFC

Major issues: N/A

Minor issues:
    In the fourth paragraph of section 1.1, the text refers to "a secure
    association between two TLS Transport Models (TLSTMs)".  As I understand
    the terminology, there is one TLSTM.  There are two instances of /
    realizations of the model.  Should the sentence refer to instances or
    realizations, rather than two models? (i-d nits gets confused by the
    references to rfc 5953 in the revision description.  After looking at it, I
    realized there was no problem here, rather it is accurate.  A comment on
    this in item 14 of the shepherd writeup would have been helpful.)

Nits/editorial comments: N/A