Last Call Review of draft-ietf-roll-applicability-home-building-08
review-ietf-roll-applicability-home-building-08-genart-lc-shirazipour-2015-03-30-00

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Document: draft-ietf-roll-applicability-home-building-08
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2015-03-21
IETF LC End Date:  2015-03-23
IESG Telechat date: NA

Summary:
This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some
comments.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:
-[Page 1], "RPL" first used in title/abstract, Would be good to spell it out.
-[Page 5], Section 2, "Monitoring of functional correctness is at least as
important.". As important as what? (not clear) -[Page 5], Section 2, "Devices
typically communicate their status regularly and send alarm messages notifying
a malfunction of equipment or network." Not clear what equipment is? network
node is an equipment? -[Page 6], Section 2.1, "for large installation"--->"for
a large installation" -[Page 8], Section 2.2.2, "fire detectors and the smoke
dampers need to be put in place to meet the stringent delay requirements."
Where can we find a value for the delay requirement of fire detectors? A value
or reference would be good. -[Page 9], Section 2.2.4,"advanced scene and group
control". Not clear what "scene" means. -[Page 13], Section 4.1, "assumes the
role as authoritative"--->"assumes the role of authoritative" -[Page 16],
section 4.1.8, please spell out first use CBC-MAC (Cipher Block Chaining
Message Authentication Code) -[Page 16], section 4.1.10, it would be good to
give the RFCs. -[Page 16], section 4.2.4, MLE to spell out at first use "mesh
link establishment" -[Page 22], "CoAp" first used in section 7.4, but spelled
out in section 8. -[Page 18], section 5.1.1., "to throw away too late
messages", how are too late messages identified? -[Page 27],
[I-D.ietf-6lo-lowpanz] to be replaced by RFC7428 -[Page 28], link to
[occuswitch] to be verified. -Through the document both "ms" and "msec" are
used. Selecting one for consistency would be better.

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson
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