Last Call Review of draft-ietf-simple-simple-08
review-ietf-simple-simple-08-genart-lc-gurbani-2013-02-11-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-simple-simple
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 09)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2013-02-14
Requested 2013-01-31
Authors Jonathan Rosenberg
Draft last updated 2013-02-11
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -08 by Vijay Gurbani (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -08 by Vijay Gurbani (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -08 by Steve Hanna (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Vijay Gurbani
State Completed
Review review-ietf-simple-simple-08-genart-lc-gurbani-2013-02-11
Reviewed rev. 08 (document currently at 09)
Review result Ready
Review completed: 2013-02-11

Review
review-ietf-simple-simple-08-genart-lc-gurbani-2013-02-11

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Document: draft-ietf-simple-simple-08
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: Feb-11-2013
IETF LC End Date: Feb-14-2013
IESG Telechat date: Not known

This document is ready as an Informational.  Some comments for
changes follow.

Major: 0
Minor: 2
Nits: 1

Minor:
- S2.1, discussion of rfc3265: RFC3265 is now made obsolete by rfc6665,
 I believe an update is appropriate here as well as other places where
 a reference to rfc3265 is made.

 Additionally, a reference to rfc3856 will be appropriate when
 we first talk about presence as a SUBS/NOT event package i.e.,
 s/Presence is defined as an event package/Presence is defined as
 an event package [RFC3865]/

- S3.2, discussion of rfc3862: Does CPIM stand for "Common Presence and
  Instant Messaging" or does it stand for "Common Profile for Instant
  Messaging", as expanded in rfc3862 itself?

Nits:

- Abstract, perhaps better for a standard document to use more
  formal language and:
  s/It breaks them up into categories/It categorizes the specifications/

Thanks,

- vijay
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Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent
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Email: vkg at {bell-labs.com,acm.org} / vijay.gurbani at alcatel-lucent.com
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