Telechat Review of draft-ietf-simple-simple-08
review-ietf-simple-simple-08-genart-telechat-gurbani-2013-02-11-00
Request | Review of | draft-ietf-simple-simple |
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Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 09) | |
Type | Telechat Review | |
Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
Deadline | 2013-02-19 | |
Requested | 2013-02-07 | |
Authors | Jonathan Rosenberg | |
I-D last updated | 2013-02-11 | |
Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -08
by Vijay K. Gurbani
(diff)
Genart Telechat review of -08 by Vijay K. Gurbani (diff) Secdir Last Call review of -08 by Steve Hanna (diff) |
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Assignment | Reviewer | Vijay K. Gurbani |
State | Completed | |
Request | Telechat review on draft-ietf-simple-simple by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
Reviewed revision | 08 (document currently at 09) | |
Result | Ready w/issues | |
Completed | 2013-02-11 |
review-ietf-simple-simple-08-genart-telechat-gurbani-2013-02-11-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-simple-simple-08 Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani Review Date: Feb-11-2013 IETF LC End Date: Feb-14-2013 IESG Telechat date: Not known This document is ready as an Informational. Some comments for changes follow. Major: 0 Minor: 2 Nits: 1 Minor: - S2.1, discussion of rfc3265: RFC3265 is now made obsolete by rfc6665, I believe an update is appropriate here as well as other places where a reference to rfc3265 is made. Additionally, a reference to rfc3856 will be appropriate when we first talk about presence as a SUBS/NOT event package i.e., s/Presence is defined as an event package/Presence is defined as an event package [RFC3865]/ - S3.2, discussion of rfc3862: Does CPIM stand for "Common Presence and Instant Messaging" or does it stand for "Common Profile for Instant Messaging", as expanded in rfc3862 itself? Nits: - Abstract, perhaps better for a standard document to use more formal language and: s/It breaks them up into categories/It categorizes the specifications/ Thanks, - vijay -- Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent 1960 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9C-533, Naperville, Illinois 60563 (USA) Email: vkg at {bell-labs.com,acm.org} / vijay.gurbani at alcatel-lucent.com Web: http://ect.bell-labs.com/who/vkg/