Last Call Review of draft-ietf-tls-external-psk-importer-05
review-ietf-tls-external-psk-importer-05-genart-lc-carpenter-2020-10-06-00

Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-tls-external-psk-importer-05

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Document: draft-ietf-tls-external-psk-importer-05
Reviewer: Brian Carpenter
Review Date: 2020-10-07
IETF LC End Date: 2020-10-15
IESG Telechat date:  

Summary: Ready with issues
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Issues:
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>1.  Introduction
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>    Applications SHOULD provision separate PSKs for TLS 1.3 and prior
>    versions when possible.

I think that "when possible" could easily be used as a loophole by a
lazy implementer. ("Impossible, because I'd have to refactor my code.")
Since presumably this rule is to avoid all risk of a "related output"
cryptanalytic vulnerability, why weaken the RFC2119 definition of SHOULD?
The formal definition of SHOULD is stronger, with "the full implications
must be understood and carefully weighed before choosing a different
course." So I suggest simply deleting "when possible".

>6.  Incremental Deployment
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>   Recall that TLS 1.2 permits computing the TLS PRF with any hash
>   algorithm and PSK.  Thus, an EPSK may be used with the same KDF (and
>   underlying HMAC hash algorithm) as TLS 1.3 with importers.  However,
>   critically, the derived PSK will not be the same since the importer
>   differentiates the PSK via the identity and target KDF and protocol.
>   Thus, PSKs imported for TLS 1.3 are distinct from those used in TLS
>   1.2, and thereby avoid cross-protocol collisions.  Note that this
>   does not preclude endpoints from using non-imported PSKs for TLS 1.2.
>   Indeed, this is necessary for incremental deployment.

I read this three times and I have to ask whether "TLS 1.2" is
really what you want in the penultimate line.

Nits:
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>4.1.  External PSK Diversification
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>   ImportedIdentity.target_protocol MUST be the (D)TLS protocol version
>   for which the PSK is being imported.  For example, TLS 1.3 [RFC8446]
>   and QUICv1 [QUIC] use 0x0304. 

As far as I can tell, [QUIC] doesn't specify this, but draft-ietf-quic-tls
does specify that QUICv1 uses TLS1.3. So the phrasing is a bit misleading.
Maybe:

  For example, TLS 1.3 [RFC8446] uses 0x0304, which will therefore also be
  used by QUICv1 [QUIC-TLS]. 

Are all the RFC2119 terms capitalised when required? For example, there
are lower case 'may' and 'must' in the last paragraph of section 4.1
(External PSK Diversification). I couldn't determine whether they were
intended to be normative.