Last Call Review of draft-ietf-ancp-pon-
review-ietf-ancp-pon-genart-lc-even-2012-04-05-00
Request | Review of | draft-ietf-ancp-pon |
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Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 05) | |
Type | Last Call Review | |
Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
Deadline | 2012-04-05 | |
Requested | 2012-03-22 | |
Authors | Dr. Nabil N. Bitar , Sanjay Wadhwa , Thomas Haag , Li Hongyu | |
I-D last updated | 2012-04-05 | |
Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -??
by Roni Even
Genart Last Call review of -04 by Roni Even (diff) Tsvdir Early review of -?? by Allison Mankin |
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Assignment | Reviewer | Roni Even |
State | Completed | |
Request | Last Call review on draft-ietf-ancp-pon by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
Completed | 2012-04-05 |
review-ietf-ancp-pon-genart-lc-even-2012-04-05-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Sorry for the late review due to IET meeting. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-ancp-pon-02 Reviewer: Roni Even Review Date:2012–4–1 IETF LC End Date: 2012–3–30 IESG Telechat date: Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational RFC . Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: In section 4 ” However, the broadcast capability on the PON enables the AN (OLT) to send one copy on the PON as opposed to N copies of a multicast channel on the PON serving N premises being receivers” I think the “being” before the last word should be deleted General editorial comment is about page breaks which can be better like section 7 title is at the end of a page and the text is in the next page. Also some of the figures and their descriptions are split between pages.