Early Review of draft-ietf-anima-autonomic-control-plane-13
review-ietf-anima-autonomic-control-plane-13-secdir-early-xia-2018-02-23-00
| Request | Review of | draft-ietf-anima-autonomic-control-plane-13 |
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| Requested revision | 13 (document currently at 30) | |
| Type | Early Review | |
| Team | Security Area Directorate (secdir) | |
| Deadline | 2018-02-25 | |
| Requested | 2018-02-11 | |
| Requested by | Terry Manderson | |
| Authors | Toerless Eckert , Michael H. Behringer , Steinthor Bjarnason | |
| Draft last updated | 2018-02-23 | |
| Completed reviews |
Secdir Early review of -13
by Liang Xia
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Iotdir Early review of -18 by Pascal Thubert (diff) Rtgdir Telechat review of -13 by Joel M. Halpern (diff) Genart Last Call review of -13 by Elwyn B. Davies (diff) Genart Telechat review of -16 by Elwyn B. Davies (diff) Secdir Telechat review of -16 by Liang Xia (diff) Rtgdir Last Call review of -24 by Joel M. Halpern (diff) |
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| Assignment | Reviewer | Liang Xia |
| State | Completed | |
| Review |
review-ietf-anima-autonomic-control-plane-13-secdir-early-xia-2018-02-23
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| Reviewed revision | 13 (document currently at 30) | |
| Result | Has Issues | |
| Completed | 2018-02-23 |
review-ietf-anima-autonomic-control-plane-13-secdir-early-xia-2018-02-23-00
In general, this document is well-written and considers security issues
carefully throughout the whole architecture.
nits:
Abstract: /or not misconfigured/or misconfigured/
the fifth paragraph of section 6.1: the last ")" is redundant, therefore can be
deleted
some section titles don't comply the rule of starting from a capital letter
section 6.5
/("IP security", see [RFC4301] and "Internet Key Exchange protocol version 2",
see [RFC7296]/("IP security", see [RFC4301] and "Internet Key Exchange protocol
version 2", see [RFC7296])/
suggestion:
all the Figures (e.g., Figure 1,2...) should have a title for explanation
section 2, please update the last paragraph to reference RFC8174 to indicate
that lowercase versions of the keywords are not normative
Section 11 (Security Considerations) Since section 9.2 has described the
self-protection properties of ACP well, it may be useful in this section to
mention them as a whole.