Early Review of draft-ietf-anima-autonomic-control-plane-13
review-ietf-anima-autonomic-control-plane-13-secdir-early-xia-2018-02-23-00
| Request | Review of | draft-ietf-anima-autonomic-control-plane-13 |
|---|---|---|
| Requested rev. | 13 (document currently at 16) | |
| Type | Early Review | |
| Team | Security Area Directorate (secdir) | |
| Deadline | 2018-02-25 | |
| Requested | 2018-02-11 | |
| Requested by | Terry Manderson | |
| Other Reviews |
Rtgdir Telechat review of -13 by Joel Halpern (diff) Genart Last Call review of -13 by Elwyn Davies (diff) |
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| Review | State | Completed |
| Reviewer | Liang Xia | |
| Review | review-ietf-anima-autonomic-control-plane-13-secdir-early-xia-2018-02-23 | |
| Posted at | https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/secdir/4pcdI-DkVzdNfT8IqDGZmOQWnow | |
| Reviewed rev. | 13 (document currently at 16) | |
| Review result | Has Issues | |
| Draft last updated | 2018-02-23 | |
| Review completed: | 2018-02-23 |
Review
review-ietf-anima-autonomic-control-plane-13-secdir-early-xia-2018-02-23
In general, this document is well-written and considers security issues carefully throughout the whole architecture.
nits:
Abstract: /or not misconfigured/or misconfigured/
the fifth paragraph of section 6.1: the last ")" is redundant, therefore can be deleted
some section titles don't comply the rule of starting from a capital letter
section 6.5
/("IP security", see [RFC4301] and "Internet Key Exchange protocol version 2", see [RFC7296]/("IP security", see [RFC4301] and "Internet Key Exchange protocol version 2", see [RFC7296])/
suggestion:
all the Figures (e.g., Figure 1,2...) should have a title for explanation
section 2, please update the last paragraph to reference RFC8174 to indicate that lowercase versions of the keywords are not normative
Section 11 (Security Considerations) Since section 9.2 has described the self-protection properties of ACP well, it may be useful in this section to mention them as a whole.