Telechat Review of draft-ietf-anima-jws-voucher-14
review-ietf-anima-jws-voucher-14-artart-telechat-fenton-2024-11-30-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-anima-jws-voucher
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 16)
Type Telechat Review
Team ART Area Review Team (artart)
Deadline 2024-12-03
Requested 2024-11-27
Authors Thomas Werner , Michael Richardson
I-D last updated 2025-01-22 (Latest revision 2025-01-15)
Completed reviews Iotdir IETF Last Call review of -12 by Eliot Lear (diff)
Opsdir IETF Last Call review of -12 by Yingzhen Qu (diff)
Genart IETF Last Call review of -12 by Roni Even (diff)
Artart IETF Last Call review of -12 by Jim Fenton (diff)
Artart Telechat review of -14 by Jim Fenton (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Jim Fenton
State Completed
Request Telechat review on draft-ietf-anima-jws-voucher by ART Area Review Team Assigned
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/art/k7YKBKPuBG2mUU8oG8tvOXhM1j4
Reviewed revision 14 (document currently at 16)
Result Ready w/nits
Completed 2024-11-30
review-ietf-anima-jws-voucher-14-artart-telechat-fenton-2024-11-30-00
I am the designated artart reviewer for this draft.

Thanks for addressing all of my comments on -12. They are all addressed in the
text with the exception of my question on why this is separate from
ietf-anima-rfc3866bis, which was answered on the mailing list. This draft is
ready to go with the exception of a few tiny editorial nits:

Section 1, paragraph 1 move (BRSKI) and (SZTP) inside the quotes since that is
part of the titles of the RFCs.

Section 1, paragraph 3 "as enhancement of" -> "as an enhancement of"

Section 2, definition of voucher: "statement from Manufacturer" -> "statement
from a Manufacturer"

Section 2, definition of MASA: manufacturer's -> manufacturers'