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Request Review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 23)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2023-08-01
Requested 2023-07-11
Authors Linda Dunbar , Ali Sajassi , John Drake , Basil Najem , Susan Hares
I-D last updated 2023-07-26
Completed reviews Secdir Last Call review of -19 by Stephen Farrell (diff)
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Completed 2023-07-26
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Document: draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-14
Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review Date: 2023-07-25
IETF LC End Date: 2023-08-01
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary:

Major issues:

Minor issues:

1. As SD-WAN is not an IETF work item, it needs to be better defined, possibly
by reference. To understand the concept one needs to go to documents external
to the IETF such as [MEF70.1]. If that is the authoritative reference (or
there) it should be mentioned in the Introduction section.

2. Section 3.1.2

> The client interface of SD-WAN edges can be IP or Ethernet-based.

We need a definition or reference (IEEE 802.3 or MEF) of what is meant by
'Ethernet-based'.

Nits/editorial comments:

In 4.2 and 6.2.1 MEF70.1 needs to be between brackets (Informational Reference)