IETF Last Call Review of draft-ietf-raw-architecture-25
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Document: draft-ietf-raw-architecture-25
Reviewer: Behcet Sarikaya
Review Date: 2025-06-24
IETF LC End Date: 2025-06-24
IESG Telechat date: 2025-07-10

Summary:

This draft reliable and available wireless architecture in the context of
deterministic networking or DetNet, i.e. the draft

complements DetNet for wireless.

Overall, it is a good document, involving huge amount of work, especially I
liked Section 3.1.1.1 3rd and 4th paragraphs explaining wireless single point
of failure.

However it has a number of typos and issues.

Major issues:N/A

Minor issues:

It seems like on DetNet there is currently ongoing research and development
involving TSN in IEEE 802.1 and IETF. I suggest that the document makes it
clear that Sections 4 and 5 describe roughly a design which needs to be
implemented together with TSN as part of link layer.

Nits/editorial comments:

Issues:
Many typos:
Sec. 2 controled -> controlled
2.1.6 massage & 2.1.6 massaged -> message
3.2 recieve -> receive
The assumption us -> is
Along a alternative paths -> along alternative paths
5.1 fucntion -> function

Please check, possibly reword:
3.1.1.1 2nd par.

Through the games of encapsulation

3.2 OODA list Point 2
may also generate knowledge and wisdom such as a trained model for link quality
prediction

On Fig. 6 is there or not tunneling on strict RAW over Detnet?

5.1
SD-WAN
MPLS-TP undefined