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Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2024-09-18
Requested 2024-09-04
Authors Pascal Thubert , Dave Cavalcanti , Xavier Vilajosana , Corinna Schmitt , János Farkas
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Document: draft-ietf-raw-technologies-??
Reviewer: Mallory Knodel
Review Date: 2024-10-07
IETF LC End Date: 2024-09-18
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: This document is a very useful informational text about the
requirements of reliability and availability for various uses in networks
connected with wireless technologies.

Major issues: The introduction could make it clearer to the reader how the
technologies were chosen, if it is a complete set at the time of writing, and
other revisions that indicate more clearly the purpose. I also find the final
paragraph of the introduction more helpful about the document's contents than
the current abstract:
   This document browses the short and middle range radio technologies
   that are suitable to provide a DetNet/RAW service over, presents the
   characteristics that RAW may leverage, and explores the applicability
   of the technologies to carry deterministic flows. The studied
   technologies are Wi-Fi 6/7, TimeSlotted Channel Hopping (TSCH), 3GPP
   5G, and L-band Digital Aeronautical Communications System (LDACS).

Minor issues:

Other reviewers have also noted the slightly awkward "summary" subsection at
the end of each section and my suggested approach might be to include this as
the *first* paragraph for each section, before the subsections begin, eg:

4.  IEEE 802.11

[Summary paragraph without subsection heading]

4.1.  Provenance and Documents

...

Nits/editorial comments: (none).