Early Review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-net2cloud-problem-statement-41
review-ietf-rtgwg-net2cloud-problem-statement-41-rtgdir-early-peng-2024-09-09-00

Hello

I have been selected to do a routing directorate “early” review of this draft.
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-rtgwg-net2cloud-problem-statement-41

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As this document is in working group last call, my focus for the review was to
determine whether the document is ready to be published. Please consider my
comments along with the other working group last call comments.

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Document: draft-ietf-rtgwg-net2cloud-problem-statement-41.txt
Reviewer: Shuping Peng
Review Date: 9-Sep-24
Intended Status: Informational

Summary:

This document is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should be
considered prior to being submitted to the IESG.

Comments:

I wonder whether it is necessary to keep the phrase "at the time of writing
this document" shown a few times in this document. Every draft is written based
on the information obtained at the time of its writing. Moreover, this draft is
stratched over seven years for now. It is hard to tell when exactly the
corresponding text was written. I noticed in the abstract that 2023 was added,
but still.

Section 2.
Page 4. Why is the term "Underlay Connectivity Services" capitalized? And
"Application Flows"?

Section 7.
Page 19.
"While this specific protocol isn't being
        suggested the risks and vulnerabilities apply to any group key
        management system."

What is "this specific protcol" being mentioned here?

Nits:
1. page 4, s/managing cloud spending/managing Cloud spending

2. page 18, s/internet/Internet