Early Review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-vrrp-rfc8347bis-01
review-ietf-rtgwg-vrrp-rfc8347bis-01-rtgdir-early-pignataro-2025-03-23-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-vrrp-rfc8347bis-01
Requested revision 01 (document currently at 15)
Type Early Review
Team Routing Area Directorate (rtgdir)
Deadline 2025-04-04
Requested 2025-03-08
Requested by Yingzhen Qu
Authors Acee Lindem , Xufeng Liu , Athanasios Kyparlis , Ravi Parikh , Mingui Zhang
I-D last updated 2026-02-15 (Latest revision 2026-02-13)
Completed reviews Yangdoctors Early review of -01 by Michal Vaško (diff)
Rtgdir Early review of -01 by Carlos Pignataro (diff)
Comments 
The changes are to avoid the usage of non-inclusive language.
Assignment Reviewer Carlos Pignataro
State Completed
Request Early review on draft-ietf-rtgwg-vrrp-rfc8347bis by Routing Area Directorate Assigned
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/rtg-dir/-w_-xGf8WfWIy1x8ZUDO0cVIkR4
Reviewed revision 01 (document currently at 15)
Result Ready
Completed 2025-03-23
review-ietf-rtgwg-vrrp-rfc8347bis-01-rtgdir-early-pignataro-2025-03-23-00
Hi,

Please find below the Routing Area Directorate (rtgdir) review for
draft-ietf-rtgwg-vrrp-rfc8347bis-01.

Review of   draft-ietf-rtgwg-vrrp-rfc8347bis-01
Type        Early Review
Team        Routing Area Directorate (rtgdir)
Reviewer    Carlos Pignataro

Summary:

I appreciate the drive behind this -bis and commend the work!

I found no issues on a YANG module review, particularly since the update from
8347 is editorial.

I do have a couiple of concerns, however:

1. Some references, both normative and informational, have been obsoleted:

  ** Obsolete normative reference: RFC 2787 (Obsoleted by RFC 6527)
  ** Obsolete normative reference: RFC 5246 (Obsoleted by RFC 8446)
  -- Obsolete informational reference (is this intentional?): RFC 3768
     (Obsoleted by RFC 5798)

2. The NIST normative reference has been withdrawn on 02/20/2025 with a
message. Follow the URL on the reference.

   [NISTIR8366]
              "Guidance for NIST Staff on Using Inclusive Language in
              Documentary Standards, National Institute of Standards and
              Technology (NIST) Interagency or Internal Report 8366",
              NISTIR 8366, April 2021,
              <https://doi.org/10.6028/NIST.IR.8366>.

I feel both issues need fixing.

Thanks!

Carlos.